Category Archives: Historical Writing

To Cool To Try

A primary focus in my class this year has been teaching ninth graders to make deadlines and turn in their assignments on time. The main reason students fail my course is simply they do not turn work in on time, if at all. For example, our study of the Holocaust devoted 30 days to reading The Plot Against America. As a culminating task students created a character evolution timeline, which tracked one character through ten events in the story. The results were knowledgeable, creative and imaginative. Unfortunately, this assignment only had a 51% completion rate, which in turn had a negative impact on 49% of student grades.

End Cool Zone

For their next assignments, students were required to view three survivor testimonies, annotate their notes, then turn each testimony into a poem, piece of art, or an essay that tells the survivor’s story forward. The majority of students did not address the contest’s prompt when creating their work. These projects were graded on student effort, students who read the contest rules and followed the directions were awarded 95 points, those who missed one element got 85 points and those who missed two or more elements got 75 points. Late work was awarded 60 points.

Sixty percent of students turned in poems and received the following grades: 69 Fs (40% incompletion rate), 3 Ds, 24 Cs, 27 Bs, and 48 As. For poems, 89 students turned in video notes, which were worth 50 points and 81 students did not (48% incompletion rate).

Sixty-five percent of students turned in Art entries and received 59 Fs (35% incompletion rate), 2 Ds, 34 Cs, 30 Bs, and 46 As.  Only 88 students chose to turn in their video notes, 83 students (48% incompletion rate) did not turn in the required notes on a Holocaust survivor’s testimony.

Lastly, fifty-eight percent of students turned in Essay entries: 72 Fs (42% incompletion rate), 3 Ds, 18 Cs, 31 Bs, and 46 As. Only 55 students turned in notes from the survivor’s video testimony, while 77 (58% incompletion rate) students did not.

Considering the information above, it is not surprising that in the final grade distribution only 10% were As, 25% were Bs, 27% were Cs, 17% were Ds and 21% were Fs. What is surprising is how these grades cluster period by period. Most comprehensive high schools “track” students with Honors & AP programs. Thus, it is not surprising that the highest percentages of As and Bs occurred in Honors classes. What is particularly dispiriting in looking at the “regular” classes is that two of them contain majorities (66% & 51%) of students who are now ineligible for admission to a University of California.  Further, research from the MRDC indicates that more than 40% of ninth grade students fail to promote to the tenth grade on time and fewer than 20% of those students recover from failure and graduate from high school.

Ninth Grade Academies are designed to support the transition to high school by creating interdisciplinary teacher teams that have students and planning times in common. These teachers work to coordinate their courses to better meet their students’ needs. I wonder if my colleagues have similar work completion and course passage rates. How can our NGA better prepare students to complete their assignments and make deadlines instead of making excuses?

 

Final Grade Distribution by %

  A B C D F
P1 26 40 11 17 6
P2 11 46 32 11 0
P4 3 9 22 28 38
P5 9 9 31 11 40
P6 3 20 37 20 20
 

My overall course passage rate was 79%, which means my course failure rate was 21%. Overall, this isn’t bad, however, my lowest achieving class periods have course failure rates of 62% and 60% respectively. I suspect that these students have been “tracked” and the culture they have developed of not caring about grades is greater than one teacher can overcome. Nevertheless, in the Spring semester, I will double my efforts to engage these students.

Character Timeline Feedback

In an earlier post, I described a character evolution timeline project that I assigned my students to measure their level of effort in spending more than 30 days reading The Plot Against America by Philip Roth. These projects were graded on effort and earned either 95, 85, or 75 points. Late work was given 59 points.

Exemplary Effort – First Place Entries

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This entry was well-thought out with thoughtful analysis of the quotes

2015-12-13 11.57.24 This entry had nice art production values, but the author did not explain what the quotes meant.

Excellent Work – Second Place Efforts.

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There is a substantial amount of text being analyzed on this entry. It looks like this author spent a fair amount of time thinking about the novel before beginning this project.

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This entry spent too much time coloring the art and not enough time explaining what the quotes meant. I like that the page numbers were cited. This author did more than ten events.

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This entry devoted a lot of space to the emoticons. I’d like to see more analysis of the text, but the layout and content make this a solid second-tier effort.

Need to see more effort – The Bottom Third

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This entry does not look like the author spent much time thinking about the book, or selecting quotes. There was no attempt to explain what the quotes meant.

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I understand that  my students are taking five other classes and have homework and projects in each of them, however, these last two entries do not represent high school work.

Final Numbers

Out of 173 students, 31 got As (18%), 19 got Bs (11%), 37 got Cs (21%), and 85 students (49%) did not turn in timelines. Eight students received zeros for copying each other’s work. It is better to get a low grade for poor work than to lose all of the points for cheating. I expect more effort on your semester-end Holocaust projects.

Checking For Understanding

This year, Zaption has become my go-to tool as I check for understanding in my World History classes. I have learned (the hard way) that waiting for the end of unit DBQ to really “listen” to what students have learned in your class is setting yourself up for failure. After students have taken the test and written the essay, they have no motivation to go back and review the material no matter how wrong they were. So this year, I have embedded questions in my video lectures and shortened my writing assignments so that I can quickly assess student understanding and promptly correct any misunderstandings.

Exhibit A

Too Late

When this gem appeared on my Edmodo discussion board, It was too late for me to help this student. They had not listened to any of my lectures and they had misunderstood what they read in the book. Their fundamental lack of WWII knowledge was at once horrifying and hilarious.

Zaption tours allow a teacher to ask students multiple-choice, true-false, open-ended, and/or discussion board-style questions during a video lecture. The answers to these questions provide teachers with insight as to student critical thinking skills and the level of effort they are putting into their study. In one video lecture, I explain that “Genocide” and “Holocaust” are not the same thing. “Holocaust” is a word of Greek origin meaning “sacrifice by fire.” Genocide was an element of the Holocaust, but the Holocaust was the systematic, bureaucratic, state-sponsored persecution and murder of approximately six million Jews by the Nazis. Thirty seconds later, I ask the students to explain these differences in an open-ended question.

This student understands.

Holocaust is a word of Grecian origin, meaning “Sacrifice by Fire”. Genocide is the deliberate attempt to wipe out an entire ethnic, nationality, or religious group.

This student does not understand.

The difference between holocaust and genocide is holocaust is a word of the greek origin meaning sacrifice by fire and genocide is an element of the holocaust but yet the holocaust involved much more than  genocide.

This student’s careless use of the term “democratic movement” makes me red flag him for a private conversation during class the next day.

A genocide is only a small part of the holocaust while the holocaust itself is a democratic movement by a racist opinion that the german’s are a superior race and that the jews are a weak and useless race.

Zaption also provides a host of other analytics that are useful for determining who watched the videos, how long did they watch them, and how many questions did they get right. Right now the open-ended questions are my favorite.

Useful Dashboards

Tour Analytics

Analytics 2

Looking at Individual Student Performance

Responses

What have you learned from the data in your Zaption analytics? Please share your experiences and ideas in the comments section.

Character Evolution Timeline

A character evolution timeline (see sample chapter on Narrative Writing & CCSS by Olson, Scarcella, & Matuchniak) requires a reader to follow one character through a story, select textual evidence to make a claim as to what a character is feeling, and then support that claim with evidence from the text. This activity gives students practice making inferences and identifying bias in a text. The 14 photos below are of different characters from The Plot Against America.

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CCSS.ELA-LITERACY.RL.9-10.1
Cite strong and thorough textual evidence to support analysis of what the text says explicitly as well as inferences drawn from the text.

CCSS.ELA-LITERACY.RL.9-10.2
Determine a theme or central idea of a text and analyze in detail its development over the course of the text, including how it emerges and is shaped and refined by specific details; provide an objective summary of the text.
CCSS.ELA-LITERACY.RL.9-10.3
Analyze how complex characters (e.g., those with multiple or conflicting motivations) develop over the course of a text, interact with other characters, and advance the plot or develop the theme.
CCSS.ELA-LITERACY.RH.9-10.1
Cite specific textual evidence to support analysis of primary and secondary sources, attending to such features as the date and origin of the information.
CCSS.ELA-LITERACY.RH.9-10.2
Determine the central ideas or information of a primary or secondary source; provide an accurate summary of how key events or ideas develop over the course of the text.
CCSS.ELA-LITERACY.RH.9-10.3
Analyze in detail a series of events described in a text; determine whether earlier events caused later ones or simply preceded them.

Semester End Deadlines

The 15 week grades revealed that many of my 9th graders are having time management challenges. The purpose of this post is to provide clear expectations for all semester end projects and deadlines for all of my World History classes.

50 pts The Plot Against America Reading Log Dec. 7
100 pts The Plot Against America Character Time Line Dec. 7
100 pts Holocaust Survivor Poem Dec. 14
50 pts Video Notes Dec. 14
100 pts Holocaust Survivor Art Piece Dec. 14
50 pts Video Notes Dec. 14
100 pts Holocaust Survivor Essay-Speech Dec. 14
50 pts Video Notes Dec. 14
600 points for your final grade. Late work will not be accepted

Students in my class started reading The Plot Against America on Monday, October 26th. For the first week, students listened to the audio book as they read. After five days, I took the training wheels off and asked students to start keeping a daily log of what page numbers they read and to summarize what happened in a reading log.

Char Evo Timeline.jpg

A Character Evolution Timeline from Olson, Scarcella & Matuchniak (2015) requires a reader to review the sequence of events that occur in a text and to plot it out graphically, much like a storyboard. However, in the graphic display, the reader can chart a character’s changing emotions by selecting: (1) a facial expression to reveal the character’s emotions during key events; (2) a quote that illustrates why or how the character experiences this emotion; and (3) a symbol to characterize that emotion. Beneath the quote, the reader needs to write an interpretation of the impact of the event on the character in his or her own words. This exercise in character analysis and forming interpretations helps students detect motivation and bias in historical texts. Students must complete a character log on one of the characters from The Plot Against America with at least 10 events. The timeline (at least 10 events) and the reading log (with at least 20 entries) are due on December 72015 at 3:00 pm.

All my World History students will complete their study of the Holocaust by creating entries that commemorate a Holocaust survivor’s eyewitness testimony. Students must turn in annotated notes for the testimony that inspires each poem, essay, and art piece they complete. Some students may find it helpful to use Video Notes to organize their thoughts on each testimony.

PROMPT: As you listen to the oral testimony of a Holocaust survivor or rescuer, you may sense a change in tone that makes you stop and listen again. Something about the way the person speaks tells you that this memory matters in a special way. For the survivor or rescuer, this memory needs telling forward.

All entries and supporting materials are due by 3:00 pm on Monday, December 14th. Poem and Essay entries must be typed and in 12 point Times New Roman Font, single-spaced. Art and poetry entries must include a 100-word artist’s statement containing: the title of the work; the name of the survivor to whose testimony this work is a response, and a statement of how this work addresses the prompt. The name and class period of the person creating the entry should NOT APPEAR on the front of the entry. Keep all identifying information on the back of the entry.

View the contest’s complete rules here:

All entries will be blind judged by a panel of Kennedy teachers who will choose the top three entries that will be entered in Chapman University’s 17th Annual Holocaust Art and Writing Contest. Students will be eligible to win the first prize of $500 and the second prize of $250 in each category in the high school competition. The first place winner in each category, recipient’s parent/guardian and teacher are all invited to participate in an expense-paid study trip June 21-25, 2014, to visit the United States Holocaust Memorial Museum and other sites in Washington D.C.

Websites for Survivor Testimonies

http://www.the1939society.org/projects/

http://sfi.usc.edu/teach_and_learn/student_opportunities/chapman

http://www.youtube.com/uscshoahfoundation

To understand the level of competition in this contest, please review these examples of Previous Winners. Please note that Dr. Petri has been known to generously award bonus points to students who turn in their projects ahead of schedule. Manage your time wisely.

LACOE PD Resources

Common Core Historical Writing Seminar

Scott M. Petri, LACOE

November 17, 2015

8:30 – Introductions

https://www.surveymonkey.com/r/HSSWRITE

9:00 – Using Writing to Increase Reading Comprehension

MEAL https://historyrewriter.com/2015/04/27/meal-paragraphs/ and https://historyrewriter.com/2015/06/24/wwii-meal-paragraphs/

RAFT https://historyrewriter.com/2015/08/03/raft-writing-prompts/

Six Word Stories https://historyrewriter.com/2015/04/13/six-word-definitions/

Tweet-athons https://historyrewriter.com/2015/04/20/great-terror-tweetathon/

Ryhming Tweets https://historyrewriter.com/2014/08/26/twittercide-of-socrates/

Klemp https://historyrewriter.com/2015/05/27/strategies-for-teaching-vocabulary/ and https://historyrewriter.com/2015/05/20/teaching-vocabulary-to-older-students/

Link to shared work: http://tinyurl.com/oykufhe

10:15 – Historical Narrative

Colby – Energizing the Social Studies Classroom

Olson, Scarcella & Matuchniak (2015) Story Mountain

11:00 – Informative/Explanatory Writing

First Person Research Paper

Fitzhugh – Meaningful Work

https://historyrewriter.com/2015/05/05/final-research-papers/

https://historyrewriter.com/2015/03/16/ww2-speech-project/

Link to shared work: http://tinyurl.com/oykufhe

12:00 – Lunch Break 45 min

12:45 – Argumentative Writing

http://tinyurl.com/nl5f3cq

A blank Vee Diagram and a completed Vee Diagram

Thesis Development

Believing/Doubting Game

Monte-Sano – What Makes a Good History Essay?

Link to shared work: http://tinyurl.com/oykufhe

http://www.pearltrees.com/scottmpetri/argumentative-writing/id14650003

2:00 – Providing Feedback

http://www.pearltrees.com/scottmpetri/providing-meaningful-feedback/id14984527

Goal-setting Strategies

Whole Class Feedback

1:1 Conferences

Closing the Gap

Favorite Feedback: Fact & Fiction (Turnitin)

Kaizena – demo

Voxer

Link to shared work: http://tinyurl.com/oykufhe

3:00 – Robo-readers

Grammarly

Hemingway App

Paper Rater

Run student work through

https://docs.google.com/document/d/19ztqLA7LuYJ3bBOtaeSBomgOcJmYMoDN2yIfG22IQ9A/edit?usp=sharing

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1qZT5l_LJ0QCIAVopwSvSeUh9UVqll9dzxzLLs9jeUJs/edit?usp=sharing

Link to shared work: http://tinyurl.com/oykufhe

3:15

Pearl Trees

Blog Tour

Evaluation

#NCSS15 Effective Feedback Presentation

Jackson Square photo

Corbin Moore and I did a presentation on Providing Effective Feedback at the National Council for the Social Studies annual meeting in New Orleans. Our presentation clarified some of John Hattie’s research on feedback.

Here are the slides for the presentation. Here is a list of resources that helped create this presentations.

Clarifying Hattie’s definition: Feedback happens after a student has responded to initial instruction, when information is provided regarding some aspect(s) of the student’s task performance. It is most powerful when it addresses faulty interpretations, not a total lack of understanding. Feedback can be accepted, modified, or rejected.

Feedback in classrooms was evaluated with a meta-analysis examining 196 studies and 6,972 effect sizes. The effect size was twice the average effect. To place this into perspective, feedback has one of the highest influences on student achievement in Hattie’s (1999) synthesis, behind direct instruction and reciprocal teaching.

While direct instruction and reciprocal teaching are complex instructional strategies that require a great deal of professional development, almost anyone can provide effective feedback. We see this on American Idol & The Voice every week. With regular practice all teachers can get better at providing suggestions for improvement, giving specific notes in the margins, and using examples (mentor texts), rubrics and criteria charts.

Turnitin has conducted research on the gap between what teachers and students perceive as effective feedback.

Turnitin_FavoriteFeedback_infographic

There are two short videos below that demonstrate concepts in the presentation.

Rubric Validation

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=YSLuw4ed2xs

Whole Class Feedback

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=wJMyvwjpm-s

Make Writing

Inspired by Angela Stockman’s new book Make Writing, today my students brainstormed ways they could demonstrate their knowledge of the historical novel The Plot Against America without writing to a prompt that I created for them.

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Pictures are posted below and my review on Angela’s new book will be published in a couple of days.

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Angela’s book turns conventional writing strategies and teaching upside down. She spills you out of your chair, shreds your lined paper, and launches you and your writers workshop into the maker space! Who even knew this was possible?

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Stockman provides five right-now writing strategies that reinvent instruction and inspire both young and adult writers to express ideas with tools and in ways that have rarely, if ever, been considered.

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Many schools are converting classrooms to maker spaces–vibrant places where students demonstrate learning by constructing things, using newly-acquired skills and applying newly-learned concepts.

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With inspired creativity and ingenuity, Stockman shows you how to bring modern maker moves into your writers workshop, giving birth to new environment  that rockets writers to places that were previously unimaginable.

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We will see how well my students’ projects on the Philip Roth novel turn out.

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#CHSSP25 Presentation

CHSSP

Spending a great day at UCLA for the 25th anniversary California History-Social Science Project. I presented with @raluevanos also known as Ruth Luevanos on Inspiring Reluctant Writers. While Ruth concentrated on word banks, sentence frames and tableaus, my section was devoted to writing strategies that strengthen higher order thinking methods used in argumentative and informative writing. As an added bonus, they are easy to add into your everyday classroom practices. This article describes the tension that History teachers have experienced trying to teach both content and literary skills.

Timeline Transitions

A very simple way to have students write background paragraphs. I used to fall into the lazy teacher trap of having students copy the timeline at the end of the chapter as a pre-reading strategy. I quickly learned that they learn nothing from this even though I positioned it as a pre-reading strategy. Then I added an annotation component, which helped a little. Now I give students the big, fat, hairy timeline and tell them they need to pick the five most important events and use them to write a background paragraph. They have a word bank and get a chance to practice transition words and phrases, which many lack. Then students can pair/share their paragraphs and discuss which events they thought were the most important.

SRSD Writing Strategies

More than 40 studies have validated SRSD as an instructional model for teaching writing to students with writing deficits. Developed by Harris & Graham (1992), this model integrates writing instruction, self-regulation strategies, and the development of positive student attitudes toward writing. https://historyrewriter.com/2014/12/04/srsd-instruction/

Studies of history classrooms reveal that writing instruction of any kind is uncommon, even among exemplary teachers. Thus, student essays tend to list facts rather than argue claims, leave arguments unexplained, and only draw on evidence sporadically. https://historyrewriter.com/2014/12/09/srsd-writing-in-history/

MEAL Paragraphs

M.E.A.L. paragraphs are a method of writing strong paragraphs. This link shows you how to teach students to write a MEAL. https://historyrewriter.com/2015/04/27/meal-paragraphs/ and this link showcases some student work. https://historyrewriter.com/2015/06/24/wwii-meal-paragraphs/

RAFT Paragraphs

https://historyrewriter.com/2015/08/03/raft-writing-prompts/

As a general rule, a MEAL prompt is designed to help students analyze evidence to support an argument while a RAFT prompt requires students to inform/explain a historical topic to an audience.

SCSSA Presentation

Here is a presentation I did on Saturday, October 17, 2015 for the Southern California Social Science Association in beautiful Burbank, California. I also provided an archive of argumentative writing resources via Pearl Trees.

http://www.slideshare.net/mrpetri/slideshelf

Argumentative Writing Notes

This presentation focused on the work of Hillocks, Fletcher, and Heinrichs. Hillocks offers teachers a common vocabulary to use consistently with students. Fletcher uses Loop Writing and the Believing/Doubting game to get students examine both sides of an argument. I have adapted her methods for a social studies lesson. MEAL paragraphs allow teachers to give students daily practice in argument writing. Teachers who want additional ideas about teaching argumentation should consult Heinrichs’ Thank You For Arguing.

Hillocks

The process of working through an argument is the process of inquiry. At its very beginning is the examination of data, not the invention of a thesis statement in a vacuum.

Claims are almost never substantiated. 4 out of 5 dentists recommend… A literary critic must cite the works discussed and quote from the texts to prove a claim. A historian must carefully note the artifactual or documentary evidence basic to the argument being made.

Without analysis of any data (verbal and nonverbal texts, materials, surveys and samples), any thesis is likely to be no more than a preconception or assumption or clichéd popular belief that is unwarranted at best and, at worst, totally indefensible.

Warrants may be common sense rules that people accept as generally true, laws, scientific principles or studies, and thoughtfully argued definitions. Two claims can be made viewing the Furigay illustration: It was suicide. It was murder.

Approach the teaching of argument from the examination of data, as a first step. Once we have examined data to produce a question and have re-examined the data to try to produce an answer to the question, we may have a claim or thesis worthy of arguing. If the data support our answer to the question, it becomes evidence in support of the claim we make.

  1. Examine data
  2. Ask questions based on data
  3. Reexamine data
  4. Try to answer the questions
  5. Data that supports our answer = Evidence

DBQs do this in a limited way. Most students struggle when characterizing primary sources and don’t understand how to apply the evidence within them. Students need shorter, more frequent, and lower-stakes writing tasks to learn how to write arguments.

Fletcher

Asking students to write the thesis first is putting the cart before the horse. It’s hard to ask a question about an on-going conversation when you don’t listen to the conversation first. – Carol Jago (Fletcher forward).

Loop Writing uses five-minute timed unveilings. Each prompt ups the ante a little. Should burning the flag be protected under the First Amendment? Does the death penalty violate the Eighth Amendment? The “loop method” encourages deeper thinking about a topic as well as intellectual engagement. Purpose of Loop Writing is to examine one issue in depth to move past superficial understandings and develop a sophisticated or new perspective on the issue.

Playing The Believing & Doubting Game

  • We suspend all judgment and give the writer the benefit of the doubt.
  • Most students have this non-critical approach to reading their History book.
  • Listening to a text (close reading – RLH) and postponing judgment requires more effort than analyzing texts. We need to temporarily try the writer’s ideas on for size.

Playing the Believing Game/Doubting Game with the Declaration of Independence might enable students to carefully look through Jefferson’s arguments about separating with England. It would also be interesting to do it with the arguments in Thomas Paine’s pamphlet Common Sense.

Points to Remember

  1. Academic writing begins with academic reading. Most of our students do not have enough background knowledge to write a strong argument. They need help gathering and organizing information.
  2. Argumentation involves asking and answering questions.
  3. A well-developed questioning habit is a key trait of college-ready writers.

Prompts to Deepen Student Thinking

  1. How do you know if something is true or only an opinion?
  2. How do you decide if something is better or worse than something else?
  3. Describe a time when you decided something was more important than something else. How did you reach that decision?
  4. Describe a time when you were able to see something from a different point of view. What helped you to understand a new perspective?

Playing The Doubting Game

The object of this game is disbelief. These questions prompt a mistrust of the text:

  1. Does the writer say anything that bothers me?
  2. Are any of the writer’s claims unsupported?
  3. Does the writer draw any dubious conclusions?
  4. Does the writer contradict him/herself?
  5. Do I disagree with any of the writer’s claims or assumptions?
  6. Are there any reasons not to trust this writer?
  7. Does the writer leave anything out?